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Saturday, May 23, 2015

The Horror story of a boy

Once there was a boy, his name was Johnathan . He had no family he was living with his foster parents who showed no respect to anyone he was angry with his life. His foster parents did not gave him good food or good clothes he was a very dirty boy so nobody showed respect to him. One day he was very angry he  made a terrible wish before going to sleep and he said "please God end all of this!" He just forgot to say two word "including me" and that wish was granted and when he woke up he saw it was 1:00 pm and he said "my foster parents wake me up at 4:00 am ". "why not today?". He saw that the streets were empty and no one was there, so he went to see his foster parents but they were not in there room and he shouted in fear,"where is every body?" Then he went out side to get some food and when he started walking he stepped on a puddle; well that was no puddle that was a hole filled with blood. He was shocked. 

His heart beat accelerated like a caged beast screaming for freedom and got in his throat. His legs felt weak and he couldn't go any further so he fell on his knees and took deep breaths, trying to compose himself. Finally, after much trying he stood up and saw to his horror people hanging from the street light poles. He started running run as long as legs could take him far from that area. he was so scared he barely see whats coming in front because of his sweat around his eyes then suddenly a light appeared  he put his hands in front of his eyes then he fainted when he woke up he saw dead people lying around some hanged from trees then he committed suicide by drowning in blood.

21 comments:

  1. I am fascinated by this. Affaan this post is announcing to the world that this writer has the potential to sway the masses. It is good. I could not have written something like this at your age. Keep it up. Show it to everyone.

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  2. Ooooo affann, gruesome and horror..
    Its pretty good..some of the scenes were so well detailedd...i wish it wouldve been longerr..
    so bravoo!!!

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  3. Horrible story affan. I can feel something creeping on me. Hahaha that's what you made me feel by your story. Great work and keep surprising me, your mom and dad and everyone who reads your blog.

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  4. So much violence. What a horrific story. you seem to be following Noman Chachu steps of scaring everyone. :)
    But very expressive and detailed story.

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  5. Amazing story affaan! I was on tenterhooks for the next part. Simpy amazing!

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  6. You have good writing skills but this story was too graphic and evil for me and I assume you too.
    Write something which is not about killing other or oneself because that is going on in the world already too much.
    You are a good writer no doubt .

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  7. Your writing style is good but the message is too terrible. The stuff you read, watch and write affects your thoughts.
    You can also share your own experiences on your blog.

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    1. By the way, here's my blog's address if you want to visit it: http://fatimasarchives.blogspot.com/

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  9. please send me your sister's blog's addres

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  10. Affaan i keep on reading ur story again and again but never get bored! Just love it!
    (Also check out my blog wonderwhimsies.blogspot.com)

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  11. Hi! Just wondering... won't you post more stuff on your blog?

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  12. i really got scared while reading this story. it is awsome

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  13. i really got scared while reading this story. it is awsome

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  14. Wow. This is simply brilliant. A good plot with well knitted opening and closing. Keep it up big boy.

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